[News in Level 영어 학습] 241210

 

 

LEVEL 3

Military units in eastern Spain are searching for bodies in rivers and flood-affected areas, as at least 89 people remain missing after severe flooding hit Valencia last week.

So far, over 200 people have died, but only 133 have been identified. Relatives of the missing are being asked to provide DNA samples to help identify bodies. Spanish Prime Minister Pedro Sanchez announced 11.6 billion dollars in aid for the disaster, including cash assistance and loans for small businesses and freelance workers, as well as covering cleanup and infrastructure repair costs.

Nearly 15,000 police and military personnel have been deployed to help with rescue and recovery efforts, but there has been criticism over the government’s response time. Local leaders blame Spain’s river monitoring agency for not issuing alerts sooner. However, the agency stated regional governments were responsible for flood alerts.

Meanwhile, a scientific research vessel arrived in Valencia to search in hard-to-reach areas, as there are concerns that some victims may have been swept out to sea.

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LEVEL 1

Big floods hit eastern Spain last week. About 89 people are still missing.

More than 200 people die. The government is asking families to give DNA samples to help find and identify bodies. Spain’s leader, Pedro Sanchez, says that the government will give money to help people and businesses. Over 15,000 police and soldiers are helping to clean up.

Some people are angry. They say that the government reacts too slowly. People do not know that floods are coming. They have little time to leave the area. Soon, a special boat arrives in Valencia. It helps search in rivers and other areas. It is possible that some people die in the sea.

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Answer

After the flood of Spain, the government are finding victims, but 89 people are missing and over 200 of people are dead, but just about 100 people are identified. the government request people to give DNA data to find victim's families. And they also give money to victims. Some people are angry, because the government didn't inform that disaster will come to citizens. And they are finding not only river but also harbor because they concerned that some victims flow away to the sea.

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Reviewing my answer by Chat GPT

1. 문법 및 시제 오류 수정

• 원문: "the goverment are finding victims"
  • 문제점: 동사의 주어가 단수(the government)임에도 복수 동사(are)를 사용.
  • 수정: "the government is working to locate victims"
  • 이유: 주어가 단수이므로 동사도 단수 형태(is)로 일치시켜야 합니다. 또한 "finding victims"는 조금 더 구체적인 의미로 *"working to locate victims"*로 수정하여 문맥에 맞게 표현.

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2. 문장 구조 개선 및 어휘 선택

• 원문: "but 89 people are missing and over 200 of people are dead, but just about 100 people are identified."
  • 문제점: 중복된 "but" 사용과 어색한 어휘(over 200 of people).
  • 수정: "but 89 people are still missing, and over 200 have died, with only about 100 identified so far."
  • 이유:
    1. 중복된 but을 제거하고 자연스러운 연결 구조로 변경.
    2. "over 200 of people" 대신 *"over 200 have died"*로 간결하게 표현.
    3. "just about 100" 대신 *"only about 100"*로 더 적합한 어휘 사용.
    4. *"so far"*를 추가해 시점을 명확히 함.

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3. 세부 내용 및 표현 명확화

• 원문: "the goverment request people to give DNA data to find victim's families."
  • 문제점: *"request people to give"*에서 동사의 형태가 어색하며, *"victim's families"*는 의미가 모호함.
  • 수정: "The government has requested families to provide DNA samples to help identify the victims."
  • 이유:
    1. *"has requested"*로 현재완료형을 사용해 더 자연스러운 시제 표현.
    2. "to give DNA data" 대신 *"to provide DNA samples"*로 정확한 표현.
    3. "to find victim's families" 대신 *"to help identify the victims"*로 맥락에 맞는 표현으로 수정.

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4. 의미 명확화를 위한 추가 수정

• 원문: "And they also give money to victims."
  • 문제점: 단순 표현으로 내용이 명확하지 않음.
  • 수정: "Additionally, financial support is being provided to those affected."
  • 이유: *"financial support"*로 구체적이고 전문적인 표현 사용. 또한 "being provided"를 사용해 정부의 지속적인 노력을 강조.

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5. 비판 관련 문장 명확화

• 원문: "Some people are angry, because the government didn't inform that disaster will come to citizens."
  • 문제점: 어휘 선택과 시제가 부자연스러움.
  • 수정: "However, some citizens are angry because the government failed to warn them about the impending disaster."
  • 이유:
    1. "inform that disaster will come to citizens" 대신 *"failed to warn them about the impending disaster"*로 자연스럽고 정확한 표현 사용.
    2. "will come" 대신 과거 시제 *"failed"*에 맞게 변경.

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6. 문장 연결과 구체화

• 원문: "And they are finding not only river but also harbor because they concerned that some victims flow away to the sea."
  • 문제점: 문장 연결이 어색하고 문법적 오류(they concerned).
  • 수정: "Efforts are underway to search not only rivers but also coastal areas, as there are concerns that some victims may have been swept out to sea."
  • 이유:
    1. *"not only river but also harbor"*를 *"not only rivers but also coastal areas"*로 자연스럽게 수정.
    2. *"they concerned"*를 *"there are concerns"*로 문법적으로 수정.
    3. "flow away to the sea" 대신 *"may have been swept out to sea"*로 자연스러운 영어 표현 사용.

 

Revised Answer:

After the floods in Spain, the government is working to locate victims, but 89 people are still missing, and over 200 have died, with only about 100 identified so far. The government has requested families to provide DNA samples to help identify the victims. Additionally, financial support is being provided to those affected. However, some citizens are angry because the government failed to warn them about the impending disaster. Efforts are underway to search not only rivers but also coastal areas, as there are concerns that some victims may have been swept out to sea.

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11.6 billion dollars (eleven point six dollars)

freelance worker (a self-employed person)